Applying to USC, could someone advise me on my essay?

<p>I just finished my USC application - and my essay is 1000 words over. Could someone please let me know their thoughts? </p>

<p>It's appreciated as I think it is too "children's book" ish....</p>

<p>Thank you!

<p>I can give it a read and give you some feedback. Just pm me.</p>

<p>word limit is 500-700 but i ll read it</p>

<p>you can PM me.</p>

<p>I'll read it too. PM me.</p>

<p>sure send it</p>

<p>i'll read it...</p>