<p>Ah, so you clicked. </p>
<p>I have a personal statement ready for brutal, soul crushing critique. Volunteers?</p>
<p>Here’s the beginning:
“In a nocturne of the small hours, searchlights glared through my living room window with the intensity of a thousand suns. Mr. Sleep died. ‘What’s happening?’ There was a strong knock on the door. Alone, I peeked through the tiny window and saw what I interpreted as a WW2 helmet. Sensing urgency, I opened the door. He seemed out of place; the man was young and dressed in green military fatigues…”</p>
<p>Don’t be shy.</p>
<p>Well, the term I prefer is ‘soul-rending’. Souls are more like silk cloth than like bones, you see.</p>
<p>Souls are all too susceptible to harm, but what doesn’t kill you makes you stronger…I think. ***** I think i saw something move in the corner</p>
<p>Do you want to check my PS?</p>
<p>Yea, sure.</p>
<p>Email sent.</p>
<p>Is this for fiction writing?</p>
<p>Ah, no, its my personal statement. The essay colleges look at to find out more about you. I’ll start sending private messages as soon as I get the power…</p>
<p>Seventh Post. Only Eight more to go.</p>
<p>"nocturne |ˈn</p>
<p>I like the word.</p>
<p>I’m still gathering posts, so bear with me; if you want to look at my personal statement, pm me or post. (post 13, only two more to go…)</p>
<p>pm me please!</p>
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<p>Sorry.</p>
<p>I revised my personal statement. Who wants to have a look?</p>
<p>I will! Pm me</p>
<p>Can someone help me i dont graduate till 2015 but i want to get started on looking for colleges and everything else</p>
<p>I sent a message “ObeyGee”. Did you check that link?</p>
<p>Very well written and descriptive, good word choice. I would get rid of “I saw what I interpreted as” that’s redundant and starting a sentence using “Sensing urgency” just doesn’t seem write maybe I sensed urgency or different wording for that otherwise it’s great.</p>