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<p>I need help with this poem supplement </p>

<p>here are my stats
Hey I am new to this but i hear its pretty helpful. I hope you guys can help.</p>

<p>I am African American
My GPA is A-/B+
No Ranking
First Generation</p>

<p>Activities

  • Senior Class President this year
  • Executive Board for 3 years
  • Volunteering over 300 hours
  • Captain of the Track team for 4 years
    -Swim Team for 2 years
  • Best Buddies President - Special Needs</p>

<p>Extras

  • Senior Projects in regards to Achievement Gap in my city</p>

<ul>
<li>ACT is 23 - 25 was my highest in Math and 23 in the other ones
SAT is 1650</li>
</ul>

<p>I have taken 6 AP so far including Euro, Calc AB, US History, Lit, Lang and Spanish
all of my grades are pretty much As</p>

<p>I teach at my Church and help with special needs outside of school
My essay is about my fathers stroke & how it has helped me change</p>

<p>My recs are AMAZING.</p>

<p>I have this so far </p>

<p>L eader
Y earn
Dedication
I ndependent
Amazing </p>

<p>I feel like that wont cut it. Any ideas ?</p>

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<p>I wrote a haiku that mirrored the qualities that I discussed in my essays</p>

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<p>Honestly, that kind of poem seems like the easy way out IMHO. I doesn’t take much effort, at least now when I write them. If you are going to do a poem using the letters of your name, you should embellish instead of simply listing adjectives. For me, when I see those poems, I actually want what the first letters spell out to be the last thing I realize.</p>

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<p>I WAS going to do somethng like this:</p>

<p>Quick example, say for the first name Christian:</p>

<p>i will Clean
your House if
it’s diRty
…I will
…Sew your
…cloThes
…I will
…wAter your
.gardeN</p>

<p>Take away the periods and just add spaces to align the capitalized letters (I added periods because blank spaces don’t show up on CC). </p>

<p>And make it about yourself. Show them who you are outside of any grade or score, good or bad, or any extracurricular, significant or not. Be you.</p>

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<p>i don’t get how that reflects upon you or how it would help your admissions chances, but it is creative</p>

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<p>I second what rmmutt said. His/her poem is very creative, and the name was the last thing I noticed.</p>

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<p>That’s just an example for a (really nice) made up person named Christian.</p>

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<p>How about :</p>

<p>I can Lead you to the right way
I Yearn for every little thing I do
I can Dedicate my time to make an
Independent decision that can end up
simply amazing.</p>

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<p>That’s a lot better, but I think you’re making too many big, general statements in your poem there. If you can make it more personal and specific, it would be even more captivating.</p>

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<p>i’m not trying to be an a hole, but NYU is looking for creative students that don’t have a hard time writing poems about themselves. mine was literally about lolcats. don’t try to show them how much of a leader you are, that’s what extracurricular stuff is for. the poem is to show them who YOU are, not who college confidential is. don’t ask other people what you show add. sure critiquing is fine, but make sure you’re still showing who you are (not who you want to be or what “looks good”).</p>