Barnard supplement?

Could someone who has already gotten into Barnard or a current student read and review my Barnard supplement?!! I can pm it to you!!
im really nervous and im getting a lot of different opinions from people here. Plus Im from India so im not very familiar with the type of essays colleges in the US generally want…and neither are the people reviewing my essays!!
It would be a great help if someone who has gotten into barnard could give me an opinion.
Too casual? Too long??
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