Biographical Essay- Objective feedback, anyone?

<p>I just finished writing the essay. Would someone (preferably parents) like to have a look at it and provide me with some feedback/suggestions?</p>

<p>..........................Anyone??</p>

<p>i don't think it's wise for you to solicit feedback on your essay from people on a public message board. go to a smart adult you know and trust and ask them for their opinion (teachers, family members, coworkers, et cetera).</p>

<p>good luck</p>