Can any experienced editors help me cut down my adversity/awareness for UC prompt 1?

College Essays
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<p>Ask and I’ll PM you. It’s 750 words right now and kind of lacking in focus, I feel. Grammatically, everything’s in order - I really need an experienced editor who knows what the UCs are looking for. If anyone could help me out I’d be eternally grateful… I know it’s extremely late.</p>

<p>adversity/awareness essay*, I mean</p>

<p>And I’m trying to get into Cal and UCLA~</p>

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<p>I wouldn’t count on any experienced editors lingering around here… But if you can settle for a regular student’s insight, I’d be happy to read :)</p>

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<p>Please help me D:</p>