<p>Paragraph: When customers are paying the businesses to buy their products, they are also giving the firms unlimited chances of being able to create future investments with that money earned. With that amount of money, they can have a choice of spending it on expanding their
businesses as well later on. An expansion of a business could lead to more diversity and attract the interest of other companies customers too. </p>
<p>Sentence: With that amount of money, they can have a choice of spending it on expanding their businesses as well later on.</p>
<p>Question: Does anyone think the sentence phrased above makes any sense? if not, how do could I say it better?</p>
<p>I think you could probably phrase the whole paragraph a bit more clearly, tbh. I edited this a little bit; feel free to ignore my changes!</p>
<p>Paragraph: When customers buy businesses’ products, they are also giving the firms unlimited chances to create future investments with that money earned. With that amount of money, they can choose to spend it on expanding their businesses as well, later on. The expansion of a business could lead to more diversity and attract the interest of other companies customers, too.</p>
<p>Agree that the rephrased one is more readable… but as a business person, I really don’t understand the content entirely. What type of diversity are you talking about? Are you saying their could diversify their product offerings? Spend more on R&D? And “attracting the interest of other companies’ customers” – do you mean increase spending on advertising and increase market share?</p>
<p>what about this sentence over here: Edward Freeman credits Immanuel Kant after reiterating his theory of good management practice for businesses.</p>
<p>" They are served under the fiduciary duties, which they have agreed on with the shareholders in the beginning. People become managers under their owner’s trust "</p>