Can anyone please edit my essay?

College Essays
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<p>I have an essay that I drafted for Common App. Here is the intro:</p>

<p>“With great power comes great responsibility.”
I do not know why I remembered these words that I first heard in a Spiderman movie at that moment when I received a belt that changed my life. It’s hard to believe how a long piece of black cotton fabric could change anyone’s life. But this belt truly gave meaning to my life—a sense of fulfillment. </p>

<p>Please respond and I will PM you the full essay. Feel free to critique honestly and thoroughly</p>

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<p>Sure I can help critique.</p>

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<p>I can help edit too</p>

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<p>Sure! PM me.</p>