Can I get essay help? Applying to ivies, Vanderbilt, Duke, Michigan, UVA...

Can someone please read my essay and give me feedback? My English teacher read it and liked it a lot, she gave it full marks (it was a final project) and enjoyed the points I made. I am just worried that this essay can make or break my application, as I have pretty typical (for top tier schools) stats & ECs. Thank you so much!!

Sure

I’d be happy to read and comment.