Can one of you beautiful ladies and handsome fellows read a wannabe "deep" essay?

College Essays
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<p>I want to use this for my common app for when i apply ED for W&M. </p>

<p>I need it to be something great because my GPA last year was pathetic. So i need something outstanding. My optional essay is supposedly really good, but I’m not so sure about this one.</p>

<p>Could someone please look over these essays?</p>

<p>Remember, you are beautiful.</p>

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<p>Sure! PM me.</p>

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<p>I’ll help!</p>

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<p>private message me!</p>

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<p>thank you guys! I PMed you! :)</p>