Can somebody please review my common app essay?

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<p>I just finished my first draft and my first deadline is November 1st (eek!)… could anybody <em>please</em> read it and give me some feedback/corrections/guidance? It would be much appreciated.</p>

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<p>…anybody?</p>

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<p>Sure, I can! (:</p>

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<p>PM it to me, i’ll be glad to read it :)</p>