<p>This is my first essay and I would like to know how I can make it better and I am open to any suggestions. I can pm the essay or email it. Any help would be appreciated!</p>
<p>me read me read</p>
<p>I can help ya out, feel free to pm it over.</p>
<p>I’m a first year at Cal. I’d be happy to take a look. PM it over.</p>
<p>ljohnescu seems slightly too eager.</p>
<p>Oh and just so you know, there’s this option that allows you to change/create your state of residence. </p>
<p>So i guess if i were some low life essay jacker- i would probably set my state of residence to a state that’s relatively well known, and home to popular universities. A state like… California?</p>
<p>I’ll read…free to pm me</p>
<p>i’ll check it out, give me a pm</p>
<p>i’ll take a look at it!</p>
<p>Talk to an english teacher. Do not give out your essay online.</p>