Can someone give me feedback asap? :)

Applying to College
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<p><a href=“https://docs.google.com/document/d/1aIJzmU155wZGNH9oHOtxVO3MnYDbzfk8t4xhhnK13h8/edit?hl=en_US[/url]”>https://docs.google.com/document/d/1aIJzmU155wZGNH9oHOtxVO3MnYDbzfk8t4xhhnK13h8/edit?hl=en_US&lt;/a&gt;&lt;/p&gt;

<p>a unc supplement essay to a time you have failed. </p>

<p><a href=“https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZCoMsVRwMQy8qvRwZdYFHrt1AX3cEgRxiJoDFLrqHvU/edit?hl=en_US&pli=1[/url]”>https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZCoMsVRwMQy8qvRwZdYFHrt1AX3cEgRxiJoDFLrqHvU/edit?hl=en_US&pli=1&lt;/a&gt;&lt;/p&gt;

<p>common app essay</p>

<p>due this week any feedback would be SO appreciated!!!</p>

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<p>is anyone there??? i seriously need someone to reply to these things!!!:/</p>

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<p>Umm you have the filies set on private…</p>

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<p>it is fixed</p>

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<p>I think you have good ideas. I am not sure that you should have two essays written from the perspective of you as a young child. I would have liked to see a more mature viewpoint on failure. Also, both essays end very abruptly. In the brownie essay, you need to explain more how this informs your world view. And in the tomato essay, I would like to know if you have acted on these sentiments since the time you were 11.</p>

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<p>thanks for your advice! i get what youre saying about the common app one but i dont really know how to do the failure one…:/</p>

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<p>do you think it would be better if I talked about an orchestra audition that went wrong last year, or is that too cliche?</p>