Can someone look over "Introduce Yourself" essay?

<p>Hi there,
if anyone would be so kind as to look over that part of the supplement I'd be really grateful. I worry that I didn't emphasize enough how this effects me "day to say", or perhaps I took too long with the intro, or ended it too abruptly.</p>

<p>I'm a mess, huh?:)</p>

<p>I can PM to you if you PM me suggestions? Thank you</p>

<p>i'll read it for you! PM me</p>

<p>ill read. im applying to Penn as well so i can prolly give feedback</p>

<p>i'll read. i got into penn nursing ED</p>

<p>PM to me, i'll see if i can give some feedback</p>

<p>I'll read it.</p>

<p>I'll read it (in at Wharton ED)</p>

<p>I'll read! (Current Penn student).</p>

<p>ill read it if you'd like, pm me</p>

<p>You can PM me if you want, I just applied :)</p>

<p>I'll read it. Just finished and sent my own penn app. PM me.</p>

<p>i will, PM me</p>