♣ Can someone please critique my UC Essays?

<p>Please?
C/O 05/06 graduates preferred, but I’ll take anyone’s opinion on them right now :]</p>

<p>Post or PM me!</p>

<p>im 07 but i’d be happy to if you want.</p>

<p>ok…i 'll read it…pm it to me…mayb we can xchange…</p>