Can someone read my ILR transfer essay?

<p>So the transfer application deadline is coming up soon, and I would really appreciate it if some of you (especially current ILR students) could read my "Why ILR" essay and give me some feedback. </p>

<p>First and foremost, it's too long (800 words) whereas on the application the maximum is 750 words. If you guys could tell me what I should cut out, what I should add, and anything else I should change, that would be great.</p>

<p>Just post here if you would like to give it a read and I'll P.M. it to you!</p>

<p>I'm not a current ILR student, but if you want, I'd like to have a look at it :)</p>

<p>I got into the ILR last week. So if you want I can proofread your essay. PM it to me.</p>

<p>Thanks guys - I've sent it to both of you.</p>

<p>Anyone else?</p>

<p>send it over. I'm an ILR sophomore.</p>

<p>Sent! Any other current ILRies out there?</p>