Can you please read my Essay?

<p>I’m a high school student, taking College classes and my college English teacher is having us write an essay about ourselves while interpreting song lyrics into our writing. I would appreciate it if anyone would edit and/or give suggestions to what I should do with my paper.</p>

<pre><code> What is Yet to Come
I am a teenager, a teenager with an abundance of hopes and dreams. Everyone is different from each other. We have different beliefs, attitudes, and different opinions; but the thing that greatly singles me out, is the way I see things.
Teenagers await the future with such anticipation, but not me. I fear what is yet to come is not as glorious as I contemplate it will be. Every once in a while I will stop and think, if the path that I am taking is the right direction to success. At my old school, they had various quotes printed on the school walls, throughout the building, but there is one in specific that stood out to me. It was something along the lines of: You only get one chance at life, but if you make the right decisions one chance is all you need. Thus inspiring me to analyze my every move; “‘cause when your hourglass runs outta sand, you can’t flip it over” (Chesney) and start again.
Why I fear the future? I fear that my hopes and dreams will not come into reality. That what I greatly anticipate on becoming, at the end, will be nothing but hopes and dreams. I’ve heard of plentiful of people that ended up not being what they wished to be, all because of a simple mistake. I want to make the right decisions and live life fully, because like it says in the song Don’t Blink, “Life goes faster than you think.” (Chesney) I wish I could go back to my childhood years, and not worry if what I do will contribute to my place in the future. I remember, not so long ago that I wanted to be at the age of a legal adult already, “complainin’, sayin’, I can’t wait to turn eighteen… I’ll make my own money and I’ll make my own rules” (Adkins) Eventually, as time progressed, I found that I was getting closer to that age faster than I thought. I feel that I’m greatly unprepared, at what life is an ill be throwing at me. I completely regret wanting to grow up, “so I been tryin’ to slow it down.”(Chesney) I hope that the road that I’m walking in will lead to a gracious land.
My greatest concern of all is that the choices that I’m taking will affect the possibility of my hopes and dreams to become actuality. I’m not saying that I haven’t done the right choices, is just that I don’t know what my actions might lead to. I truly hope that most of my wishes will come true without any obstacle along the way. Many teenagers are optimistic, but definitely not me. I want my dreams to come true, but the problem is that life is not as easy as it seems.
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<p>I’d remove the essay from public view if you still can. Don’t want people to steal it and use it themselves.</p>

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that’s strange. What if someone listens to hardcore rap and knows nothing else? His essay would be filled with these “****.”</p>

<p>About the essay. I don’t see a lot of “evidence.” All you talk about are your ideal about yourself and life. (by the way I, personally, hate it when people talk about life as a whole and try to summarize it in one sentence) I think it would definitely benefit you to talk about what your actual goals are, what you have done in the past, and how you came to this perspective. Basically, my advice for you is to compress that essay into a intro paragraph and write more.</p>

<p>Again, what I said are my advice.</p>

<p>Thank you, any more suggestions?</p>