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<p>Topic :
“It is better to be underrated by people than to be overrated by them.”
John hersey
Assignment: What are your thoughts on the statement above? Do you agree or disagree with the writer’s assertion?</p>

<p>We do live in society, and, ipso facto, we are in a perpetuate examination. The examinator is society, the test-takers are each one of us and the test is our ability to succeed in life. Also, this test has two results: wether we are underrated by people or overrated by them. And as once said John Hersey: “It is better to be underrated by people than to be overrated by them.”</p>

<p>To prove that point of view, let us first go back in history to the France of the eighteenth century. Then, the people were strictly divided into social classes: the nobles, the “bourgeoisie” and the poor peasants. The noble who held the power never cared of the poor. They have always thought they can do nothing: they underrated them. But that apathy from their part gave the poor the ability of assembling themselves and emancipating from the tyrannical authority. However, if they have been overrated by those in power, their liberties would have been constrained much more and the French revolution would have never taken place.
Also, and away from history and politics, proofs of John Hersey’s saying can be found in our daily life. For example, when a new employee gets into some enterprise, he would like to be, at least at the beginning, underrated by his colleagues and his boss. That way, if he did any mistake that would be taken with no much severity, but if he did some beneficial work, he would be praised because no one had thought he could do well.</p>

<p>In conclusion, we can assume that being underrated can be an advantage so we can realize our ambition without alerting our surrounding. However, we have to mention that the fact of being underrated should be well invested in order to turn us into successful people.</p>

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<p>Haha, I don’t think quoting your prompt just for the sake of restating it adds any weight to your thesis. </p>

<p>6/12</p>

<p>Thanks for “ipso facto”! Cool phrase. :D</p>

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<p>Good Essay but voume is little. 8/12</p>

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<p>Using the quote as your thesis probably isn’t the best idea. I saw it as just a direct quote from the prompt as opposed to your actual thesis.</p>

<p>As for your examples, they’re relevant but under-developed. I’m not sure if it was a time issue or something else, but both examples (especially the second one) are definitely not elaborate enough.</p>

<p>Your essay has a solid background, but it’s not long enough. 7/12.</p>

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<p>8/12
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<p>Being underrated by the people,don’t you think we people loose our confidence level.</p>

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<p>6/12</p>

<p>Couldn’t follow your first example and your second one was not developed well.</p>

<p>You got a 6/12 because you had an intro, two examples and a conclusion which, all of which were on topic.</p>

<p>Work on essay structure; a strong intro, at least 2-3 well developed examplss, a conclusion that incorporates all examples and pushes the thesis.</p>

<p>You can be colloquial but your try not to use a thesis to support your thesis (second example).</p>