CApp essay: Is my choice of topic appropriate?

College Essays
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<p>Would anyone be kind enough to read my common application essay? I’m looking for some solid input. I think my conclusion may be abrupt or off. Could I have an outside opinion?</p>

<p>Thanks</p>

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<p>I would be happy to provide feedback. I have a B.A. from Stanford and a J.D. from Harvard (and can verify for you). If you want me to take a look, then please send me the prompt and the essay.
JP</p>

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<p>Sure, I’ll read it. Just PM it over.</p>

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<p>Sure, just PM me</p>

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<p>I’ll read it! Just pm me.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it! Pm mee</p>