Hi guys I am also applying to these boarding school I am an international male applicant from Pakistan for 9 garde.my achievements are amazing I finished to 40 in Pakistan maths contest 2nd position in Pakistan spelling bee won robotics competitions 2,3 star badges in kangaroos contests I have also hosted schools sports gala I am an exceptional athlete I play soccer track and field and basketball and cricket which is very similar to baseball ok I get A+ grades every year I have multiple certificates for first position in school and I have learned graphic design and Olympiad style mathematics and computer science on my own I also started community service initiative at school for picking up garbage and I also took initiative for planing trees what schools I am applying in Choate,Blair,Berkshire,Suffield,Loomis Chaffe,Webb School california,Milton Academy,Kent School,Mersersburg Academy and NMH School and I intend to apply test optional because non availability of SSAT test centers in Pakistan and I also might require full ride scholarship.Kindly Rate my profile.
Punctuation is your friend.
Also, while self confidence can be a good thing, try to be more enthusiastic than boastful in describing yourself. Don’t say that your achievements are amazing or exceptional - show it in more factual terms. This requires a little more detail.
I like the list of schools that you are considering. You might want to “cast a wider net”, though, given your concern about cost. While some schools offer financial aid to foreign applicants, it is very limited.
Thanks for your reply I know I just wanted you guys to rate me that’s why I listed my achievements so yeah I am listing school which I would apply I might not apply to suffield or webb
Okay.
Choice of format: 5/10. Wall of text, lack of punctuation. Needs white space.
Quality of your achievements: Hard to determine, based on what you’ve posted. Posting accomplishments in bullet point form with more objective descriptions would be helpful. What does read “I finished to 40 in Pakistan maths contest” even mean? Writing that you are an “exceptional athlete” is not informative. If you play soccer, basketball, and cricket, then what sort of teams have you been on? How many years have you been doing track and field? What are your best events?
Applying test optional is understandable, given your location. Your grades are good, but so are the grades of the majority of applicants who post here.
Positive: you are from a geographically underrepresented area.
Negative: you are an international applicant needing a significant amount of financial aid.
I think you need to focus more on who you are and what you want in a school and cast a wider net. You need to add a couple of schools that accept more than 30% of their applicants.
You are right @stalecookies
Sorry to tell that Tabor and Loomis chaffe are not granting me application fee waiver not because I need too much financial aid but they say we have extremely limited financial aid award for internationals this year The island was my second choice school but yeah I will strive for chaote.