Chance Me: IB Student with a jaded sophomore year

Hey everyone, I’m a class of 2025 student who’s about to apply to colleges in the state of NC, including:

Chapel Hill
Wake Forest
NC State
Appalachian State
UNC Charlotte

I’m in the International Baccalaureate program, specifically in the Career Program with the pathway of business/finance. My intended major is business administration, finance, or economics depending on the school. I will be a first generation college student, and I live in a rural area.

My personal essay is centered around my experience of having IBS and how it affected my psyche and concentration throughout high school. I highlight a lack of motivation that was present during my sophomore year, and how I was able to traverse it going into my junior and senior year.

As of right now, my weighted GPA is around 3.8, and about 3.3 unweighted. but it has rapidly improved since my Sophomore year. It was a 3.5 weighted around that time, and I project it will be about 4.1 weighted by the time I graduate high school. It’s very low for a Chapel Hill, Wake Forest, or NC State student, and it really haunts me.

In my personal essay, I was able to tie my academic improvement in with an intellectual improvement as well. My only time of solace during my sophomore year was when I researched topics such as finance, economics, and political science, and my essay delves into the applications of my research into actual schooling, and how I improved. I don’t want the woes of my sophomore year to define who I am.

I may go test optional for my top 3 (UNC Chapel Hill, Wake Forest, NC State) but I’m not sure. My first attempt on the SAT was an 1170, and I’ll take the SAT again several more times.

My biggest weaknesses are my GPA and potential test scores, but in a more holistic sense I believe I have a lot more.

In high school, I’ve only taken honors, AP, and IB classes besides PE.

Some of my AP/IB Classes Include:
AP GoPo
AP Human Geo
AP Psych
AP Stats
IB HOA
IB English
IB PPS
IB Business

Like I mentioned before, I had a very mediocre sophomore year, but since then I’ve consistently been a straight A student. This year, I’m taking the second part of those IB classes and principles of microeconomics and macroeconomics at my local community college.

For EC’s, I am the co-president of my schools FBLA. I also managed a portfolio for an FBLA National Stock Market Competition, which was consistently in the top 10% of the competition. I am also a member of my schools DECA, Debate Club, and Stock Market Club.

For hobbies, like I mentioned before, I love to research financial markets, economic data, and political statistics and history. Kind of weird, but yeah. Through a custodial account, I have generated massive returns on investments and I have career aspirations rooted in financial services. I am also writing a allegorical political science novel at the moment. I really have passion for these fields.

I have accumulated more than 200 service hours during my high school years, including volunteering at STEM Camps and summer schools. I have also engaged been engaged in several different business/political science opportunities that involved relative prestige.

My letters of rec will come from my former AP Psychology Teacher (who worked on Wall Street and has kind of acted as a financial mentor) and my IB Business teacher.

Overall, I feel like I’m a bit of a wild card when it comes to admissions. On one hand, I have fair EC’s and passion for the fields I like, but on the other hand my GPA is fundamentally flawed but ever improving.

I try to be realistic, so I feel like I’m going to be deferred/waitlisted from my top 3. However, if I continue to improve through the second semester of my senior year, I feel that I may be accepted to at least one of them at some point of the process. What do you guys think? Is there any hope for me?

You haven’t asked this question, but I’m going to give you my advice anyway – take it, or leave it!

I believe one aspect of the essay is to have the reader think “I really want this kid on campus! They will bring something interesting to the class. They offer something most other kids don’t.” With that in mind, overcoming IBS (though absolutely a big deal for you!) is not nearly as interesting as a kid who is fascinated by financial markets (and all the related things you are passionate about). Which defines you more, the IBS or the interest in politics/finance?

I suspect an admissions reader will think someone fascinated by finance and politics will bring a great deal to any classroom discussion, and to the community in general, in a way that overcoming IBS doesn’t.

As I said, take the above, or leave it, only you can decide what makes the most sense for you.

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I agree!

It was more of a psychological burden in class that I was able to limit throughout the rest of high school, and now it doesn’t really affect me.

I couldn’t really concentrate in class at that point, and I was too afraid to speak up. The “overcoming and research” part is more like 2/3 of the essay. The IBS part is more of exposition than anything, not the whole of the essay.

Please note that most colleges want one letter of recommendation from a teacher who taught you in a STEM subject and one from a teacher who taught you in the humanities. It would be good for you to confirm what is wanted in that regard for each of your schools, as I am not sure that the two teachers whom you mentioned meet that requirement.

Is it clear to you that whatever happened sophomore year of high school will not repeat in university? If the answer is yes, then do you think that this comes through in your personal essay in your applications?

I would tie in the IBS with how it lead to your interest in financial markets …like maybe “I was missing a lot of school, but I was able to find a passion during my time away from school…” type of thing.

Are you from NC? Your stats are not terrible if you are truly from a rural area and you’re a first gen college admit. Frankly, we live in Wake County and there’s a quota with UNC and State that make it really hard to get into - but it seems to be a hard number rather than percentage of the class. My son had 735 in his graduating class and 70 kids went to UNC and State each. My daughter graduated 500 and same numbers went - so a lot more kids percentage-wise in her class and frankly I was surprised at some that got in.

I think about it a lot, and I’m pretty confident that the same thing won’t repeat. One of the reasons I lacked a lot of motivation in my sophomore year of high school was because I couldn’t see the vision through and through, you know? In college, my goal will be the attain internship opportunities and experience, which would be consistent throughout college. The internship opportunities would keep me motivated. For my stomach, I realized my issues were mainly rooted in anxiety. I would be in classroom situations where I would have a lot of anxiety, and it just led to this sort of negative feedback loop of distress. I’ve taken the steps to quell the anxiety, and underlying stomach issues as well.

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That’s essentially what my essay is about. The passion for finance and other fields comes in as a substitute for the time I lost as a sophomore.

I live in NC, and I live in a county that’s very socioeconomically diverse. One end of the county is completely rural and desolate, while the other end is rapidly growing and suburban. I live in the rural end, and I go to school in the more suburbanized area because it offers the IB Program. It’s about a 40-50 minute drive every day, and I go by two separate high schools on my drive there.

I agree with the feedback you’re getting; it is difficult to address health issues (physical or mental) in a way that paints a positive portrait of you for AOs.

Please have a trusted teacher or counselor read your essay to give you feedback. You can also take advantage of the free essay reading services here on CC.

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Best of luck.

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