<p>Ok so from what I’ve read/heard, admissions officers like to see how one has changed and who they really are. I have two essays in mind, one I’ve already written. Which do you think would be the better option, I’ll be applying ED to an Ivy:</p>
<h1>1: Comparing myself to Bellatrix Lestrange from HP. I thought this would be different since it’s one of the bad guys, but it’ll be kind of how I was different than all the girls and about my feminist beliefs and obviously show I like to read. But I don’t know, I read colleges get a lot of Atticus Finch essays/To Kill a Mockingbird, and I bet it’s not that different with Harry Potter, albeit I won’t be doing one of the “golden trio.” I think I can stay under 750 words with this one.</h1>
<h1>2: How my car accident renewed my faith in God and my relationship with my brother.</h1>
<p>-I’ve already written this one, and I think it shows how I’ve changed b/c I overcame my germophobia which is what hindered our relationship and how it put my doubts of God to rest, but I think this might be cliche and it’s 950 words and I’ve already cut back on it, there’s not much more I can take out so the length may be viewed upon negatively because of that.</p>
<p>I’d say stick to your original essay. (#2)
It showed how a car accident changed the views of God and with your brother. It gives a through explanation (I’ve read it).</p>
<p>How about you give us #3, 4, 5, 6,7 to choose from.</p>
<p>Comparing yourself to someone is I think much. How about you just tell them what makes you you, instead of using someone else as an example, especially when not everyone may know which character you’re talking about(especially if they don’t like HP or never touched an HP book or watched a film)</p>
<p>I personally feel that CHANGE should be the results of the events/change, not what happened after x events. Having an epiphany of God, and bettering your relationship isn’t really a great change to make you stand out from Ivy applicants. Remember where you are applying to IVY LEAGUES. A more noteworthy change is you making a trip to 3rd world country, realizing the situation people live in, affecting you tremendously taht you came back to wherever you live, created an organization/club to help fundraise and send “shoes” or “clean clothes” or “packaged foods” to those in needs.
I think germophobia and you distancing your from your bro etc and then somehow changing after a car accident seems arrogant, unless the moral of the story is appreciating life that much more etc, and giving examples of how you appreciate life much more not just.</p>
<p>I agree that you might want to think of more choices.</p>
<h1>1 could be interesting if you do it right and you do it well. But you risk sounding like a book reviewer and giving a summary/characterization of BL.</h1>
<h1>2, as intense a topic as this is, sounds a little cliche (a near-death experience completely changed my outlook on life). I mean, it’s very personal so that’s good, but you don’t want to sound overdramatic or that you’re going with this topic just because you think the readers will like that.</h1>
<p>What is the most unique aspect of your personality?
What made you who you are?
Who made you who you are?
Write about that.</p>
<p>Ok thanks for your input everyone!
college316- that’s kind of the whole point about my BL essay, I’ll just briefly say that I admire her for her strength and then from there how I can relate to her b/c of what makes me unique and how I walk to the beat of a different drums than a lot of other girls/how I’m kind of the black sheep of my family too.</p>
<p>Hi honorstudent, I have homework to write an essay with heading "How has internet changed your personality and real life relashionship.</p>
<p>Here’s my writing:</p>
<p>With the time every person changes its social and intimate life.Joining the global net, the human kind is connecting easier and finding or losing real life relashionship.</p>
<p>Everybody is searching for new exciting friends and events which can make him or her happier.Definitely the virtual web show us one new world ful of new acquaintances and keeping in touch with old comrades.
For example now people find even the love of their dreams in Internet, shifting their work, or just having fun.Conversations are made in some sites, with huge amount of people from different nations.That wider(I’m not sure if this is the right word for getting big) users sight view and is a soul wealth.</p>
<p>On the other hand you surely will waste a lot of time in the chaos web, finding needless and fake information.Also many teens become addicted to the virtual reality and forget or neglect their lifes outside.</p>
<p>In my opinion there are undisputed advantages of Internet as long as you see what helps your personality and ruins it.My next attempt is write an [essay</a> about my personality](<a href=“http://essayscouncil.com%5Dessay”>http://essayscouncil.com) and also about Change vs Personality, Nowadays I am in deep research for my essays,During my research i found a quote explaining how he was becoming weaker, and more mentally unstable. Does this count as an aspect of the character’s personality?</p>