Changing History ( needs to be checked out)

<p>Assignment: can the daily actions of average people change history?</p>

<p>If you check the land beneath your feet, you’ll see nothing but peace. In fact, this land has embraced millions of men. Some of which we know, and some of which we haven’t heard about. The standard on which the mortality of human life depends isn’t related to the age, body, or even wealth. It’s related to the men’s actions. It’s related to the men’s way of creating history, this history is what keeps the land moist over their dead bodies, allowing soil to flower and trees to grow, welcoming a new world. Therefore, the most frequently asked question is: What makes a man phenomenal?! What opens the gate in front of him towards eternity? In other words, what actions give a significant impact on the course of history?Of course, the daily actions can never make a man extraordinary. Although it might help at some times introduce into a genteel action since every great man was once nothing but a credulous human, it rarely affects the human life especially that the time were human is suppose to excel is so short. Nevertheless, everyone’s got the opportunity in which a new way lays. Everyone, at a point, had the ability to stand against time, stop the routine, rebel, break the usual actions, and simply, shine.
The reason great people are appreciated is because they made use of what they had, they didn’t live like most of us; to eat, sleep, and breathe. Instead, they observed, they wondered, they searched, and then they invented. They didn’t just sleep because they feel so, they asked why? And that’s the mark between a normal and a superb person. Normal people do what they think is good, without asking why or what for? They don’t have the curiosity and enthusiasm great ones have. And that’s there reason behind their satisfaction with dull, normal, daily actions.
Great actions says itself and are easily identified; Newton, Einstein, Faraday. These are all examples of great men.If all human beings, including these miracles, rely on the theory that all great actions had come from simple ones, then no one will ever break a sweat or think outside the box. And if every simple job counts, then how come we haven’t heard of any of those who go to work everyday for example? This is not the case, since all human are different, then there are different abilities, diverse potentials, and eventually different evaluations. Yes, sometimes, as i said , small actions may lead to great ones, like a football team for example, if the players don’t collaborate in order to pass the ball to the scorer, there will be no goal. But, you mustn’t forget that if the scorer wasn’t good, or even great, he wouldn’t have scored. Instead, he would have committed a foul for example.
To illustrate, daily actions may have small impacts, but these impacts effect our personality and not our history. It might make a change in our selves and motivate us to try harder things, but whether we do them or not is a matter of will power and ability. It’s the matter of how bad a person wants perpetuity , how bad he wants fame, and how strong he fights for it. This is what makes men. This is what changes history.</p>

<p>needs to be graded please :)</p>

<p>It’s for my SAT test. Anybody!!! It needs to be graded over 12 and thx</p>

<p>thx for your feedback,
and yeah i didn’t feel comfortable about this sentence and the insufficient examples :stuck_out_tongue:
so if i’d correct the mistakes and added more detailed example i’ll have a shot?! i mean like 10 ?!?</p>

<p>with respect to meaning, i always intend to make it not easily understood because i want the reader to figure it out in the end :P</p>

<p>but i need to ask,
what other vocabulary aren’t used correctly? i mean besides the 2 you’ve mentioned so that i can correct them ?</p>