<p>I have a bit of a work in progress. It explains all of the ideas I want to express, but I am having trouble making it concise, and entertaining. Any advice would really be appreciated. It really needs a lot of help, but I just don’t know where to begin!</p>
<p>Thank you!! :)</p>
<p>Bump. If anyone could please take a look at it and give me some pointers, that would really mean a lot. I am desperate. Even if you just read the first paragraph or something that would help me out very much.</p>
<p>lol ok pm me</p>
<p>PM me, Ill look over it for you.</p>
<p>I’ll read it. PM me.</p>