<p>"Dear Carnegie Mellon Office of Admissions,</p>
<p>I am delighted that Carnegie Mellon University has honored me with a place on its Class of 2013 Waitlist. I applied to Carnegie Mellon knowing that it was a school at which I could both feel comfortable and acquire an unparalleled, wholesome education. After my visit, I became aware that it was the only school that could offer me such a scientifically focused, yet globally intensive college experience. That being said, I would like to reiterate how cheerful and thankful I am that Carnegie Mellon’s Office of Admissions has decided to reconsider my application for admission.</p>
<p>Since submitting my application in December, I successfully auditioned into my region’s District Band as the highest rated senior and, given the high quality of musical programs characteristic of Fairfax County schools, this is an especially notable achievement. In addition, this Saturday, the 24th, I will perform Eugene Bozza’s “Improvisation et Caprice” on the alto saxophone. This is worth mentioning due to the nature of the Carnegie Mellon program. During my visit, it seemed to me that faculty encourages and enjoys that students explore the boundaries between the Sciences and the Arts. I feel that my extensive experience both as a saxophonist, pianist, and student would help me to further expand upon the research and activity which exists between the areas. If I were to be admitted, I would look forward to participating in chamber groups, concert bands, and even musicals put on by Carnegie Mellon’s legendary drama department to further the development of my musical background. Indeed, my distinctive experience both as an artist and a student truly would help me contribute to the diverse Carnegie Mellon population.</p>
<p>Over these last few months I also acquired a job at United Parcel Service, UPS. Despite the time I put into this job, amongst other activities, my second quarter grades were stronger than ever, and, while they have not yet been released, I feel my third quarter grades will be of comparable magnitude. These last few months have taught me a new level of time management which would be crucial to success at any prestigious and academically challenging university.</p>
<p>It is with strong conviction that I say that if I were to be accepted off of Carnegie Mellon’s waitlist, I would most definitely attend. Though I have walked on over fifteen college campuses in the past two years, Carnegie Mellon’s was the only one on which I felt most at home, and, frankly, it is hard to imagine I might attend anywhere else. The quaint campus and unusually friendly students supported the conception that Carnegie Mellon thrives as a very involved, connected, and intellectually active community. If I were to attend Carnegie Mellon, I feel that I would make an extremely valuable contribution to the college: both during my existence as a student and as a graduate.</p>
<p>Once again, thank you for allotting me a place on Carnegie Mellon’s waitlist. The notion that I may be a part of Carnegie Mellon’s Class of 2013 is both indescribably exciting and, simply put, awesome. I look forward to your response on May 5th.</p>
<p>Sincerely, adsfasdfa"</p>
<p>comments and suggestions are very much appreciated. i plan to send this in either today or tomorrow.</p>