College Essay edit?

<p>I'll do yours if you do mine ;)</p>

<p>Here's the first paragraph</p>

<p>It was a rainy November evening, and I was drenched, half-frozen, and sobbing. I no longer cared if the drips trickling off my nose were from the sheets of icy rain pelting from the sky, or from the tears streaming from my eyes. The only sounds I could hear were the gentle plop of raindrops sliding off the alder leaves, my own shaky breathing, and the thoughts whirling around in my head. “Knock!” “No, don’t knock – it’s not your business!” “Maybe you should leave a note instead, less public.” “You’ve got to tell them!” “There’s no way you can tell them.” “Just do it!”</p>

<p>There's a whole college essays section mate ;)</p>

<p>And most people prefer to PM essays, because essays that are posted can be searched and you don't want people thinking you plagiarized yourself haha.</p>