College Essay Help

<p>If the prompt is asking me to identify a personal accomplishment and how it makes me proud, should i write it like this:</p>

<p>Describe the event only in 2 paragraphs.</p>

<p>Describe how it has made you proud.</p>

<p>Or, should i somehow try to weave the two together? --- I'm having difficulty with this.</p>

<p>And would anyone like to help me proofread my essay? Preferably someone who is well regarded.</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

<p>Ill read if you fine me trustworthy enough :]</p>