<p>Essay one:
I will talk about how I am always classified as terrorist because of indian ethnicity when I came to America. Even though the comments and torments stopped in school, the comments from society never stopped with this label. The essay will talk about the resilience and tolerance I gained from this experience and how I plan to break the stereotypes. I want to fight against ignorance and promote peace…
I will think of a catchy phrase to put in the beginning
Essay two:
I went to this international leadership allschorlarship camp where there were sixty girls from all over the world. My first tent mates were from Israel and Palestine. I was stuck in the middle of their arguments but I had no idea why they were arguing…after this experience I became more aware of what is happening in the world and how the conflicts in Israel and Palestine affects me because I have sisters there…this is also about peace and awareness </p>
<p>Can you guys advice me on the topics? What is your opinion of these two and how can I make it better? Please be honest and theses two topics are really from my heart and they have sparked something in me that made me an agent of change.</p>
<p>What are the exact prompts you are responding to? We can provide better input if we can interpret what is expected from the prompt.</p>
<p>I’m sorry about the stereotyping you have experienced. From your post, I’m guessing you are female and Indian. I’m a little surprised about your being targeted with terrorist comments, as I would expect those comments to be directed at middle-Eastern men, not Indian women. I am not aware of our “society” targeting Indian women this way, but that does not mean it does not happen, it just means I haven’t been exposed to it. It might help to provide specific examples of how “society” is doing this, in case you get a reader like me who is not familiar with that stereotyping.</p>
<p>Thank you for your reply. Well that is what I mean by ignorance, they consider my skin colour, my foreign language and other different aspects to stereotype. Sorry the prompt is-
• Some students have a background or story that is so central to their identity that they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.</p>
<p>So do you think I should stick with the second?</p>
<p>Having worked with several students from cultural minorities, I am really sorry to hear about your being discriminated. However, from a uniqueness point of view, I must say there is little that has not been said about the issue as a result of the vast coverage in both the mainstream and online media. As such, unless you have a very different take, I struggle to see how being discriminated against is ‘central to your identity’.</p>
<p>The second essay sounds a lot more personal - I would personally be more interested to hear how you have become an agent of change!</p>
<p>I think the two topics can be merged into one. Your experience with Israeli and Palestinian tent-mates expanded your awareness of a conflict that affects peace. Your own struggles with discrimination are not isolated — there are many people in many circumstances coping with stereotypes and discrimination. As an American immigrant, you may have thought you had a wide world view, but your experience at the camp significantly broadened it.</p>