<p>Hello,</p>
<p>I’m writing my Georgia Tech essay on the following prompt. It’s a fairly rough draft, and I need some help editing it. I want to include how my qualities that I derived from this piece of advice that was given to me can contribute to Georgia Tech.
Also, I feel like I’m being repetitive through out the essay. I want to be more concise and still get my point across.
I would really appreciate it if you guys could help me edit this essay.</p>
<p>At the moment there are 2962 characters. I would like to make it around 3500 to 4000 characters.</p>
<p>Thank you very much! </p>
<p>Georgia Tech Long Essay:
Prompt: What is the best advice you ever received, and did you follow it? (5,000 character limit, including punctuation and spaces)</p>
<p>Through the life experiences that have defined me as the person I know myself as today, there was one piece of advice that kept reoccurring: be Harsh. I endlessly heard this, implied or said directly, throughout the course of my adolescent life. If it was one piece of advice that I continually followed, it was this one, and doing so has been a determining factor in the person that I have become. The integral meaning of being Harsh can be derived from the most simplistic and overlooked and piece of advice that we have all heard a million times, and that is to be yourself. Eventually, I came to terms with what that piece of advice meant, and I embraced it. I was Harsh Tiwari.
Ive been Harsh all my life, and my name has evolved into one of my defining characteristics. My parents, being from India didnt know much about the English language, and took it upon themselves to find the most fitting name for me: Harsh, which can be derived from the Hindi word for happiness. Coincidently, the world harsh in the English language is used to describe unpleasant severity, and this definition became an obstacle in discovering my identity. This small coincidence in the past has become something that helped me discover my identity. I often got frustrated with people emphasizing my every action that wasnt munificent as Harsh. I felt out of place and unaccepted, regardless of what I did to fit in. I always complained to my parents about my name, and there was always that one piece of advice they would give me: be yourself, be Harsh. I continued to nag about how being Harsh was a bad thing, and that I wanted to change my name, or at least the spelling. It took me several years to fully comprehend the advice of my parents, and I finally understood the value of my name. Its the one piece of advice that had the most monumental effect on my character.
Most people have never met a boy named Harsh, and they usually found it my name surprisingly unusual. When I was young, my parents always told me that I should always help people to the best of my ability, regardless of my situation. Growing up, I aspired to be just that, generous and helpful in any way I could. Throughout several years, as people got to know me, there was one reoccurring theme I noticed amongst my peers, that they had come to appreciate the essence of who I was. Through this realization of my character, I discovered the triumph that was my name. Overcoming the stereotype of my name defined me as the person I am today. I wanted to be the one person that my peers trusted and thought of as responsible.
My peers recognize me today as the generous and helpful person I set out to be. I have changed the essence of what it means to be Harsh. I have embraced my name, and so have my peers to the extent that they have begun using my name as a characteristic of what I aspire to be. Now, whenever someone acts generous, they are Harsh, the opposite of the adjective harsh.</p>