<p>The essay topic is
“What is your comfort food and why?”
I wrote about how my favorite food, a strawberry, went through a prolific history to get to where it was at the moment I was about to eat it.
My essay is basically constructed of a lot of scientific facts(written creatively) and at the very end a powerful conclusion(in my opinion). I am just worried than an admissions counselor would find my essay too chock full of facts and without much meaning.
Does anybody think I will completely bore the admission officer or come off as unauthentic? Any comments are greatly appreciated</p>
<p>Any essay written creatively, clearly and with proper grammar can be a good essay. I think that you must remember that the key word here is “comfort.” Why do the strawberries provide you with a feeling of comfort? Since you are going with a scientific approach, maybe knowing the physiological benefits of the strawberry brings you peace of mind? Perhaps you should consolidate the facts to just a sentence or two and make sure you answer the why comfort part of the question.
If you would like to PM me, I will read it.</p>
<p>Based on the summary you gave, I think your essay might come off as trying too hard. The prompt wants to know why strawberries are your comfort food. Are strawberries your favorite food because of their prolific history? If so, you’ll want to explain why knowing these scientific facts gives you comfort when eating a strawberry. Otherwise your essay might come off as, “Strawberries are my comfort food, and I know tons of impressive things about strawberries! Here’s a report I wrote about them. I’m very intelligent, aren’t I?”</p>
<p>I haven’t read your essay, so I don’t know if it’s really like that. I’m basing this assumption entirely on the summary you wrote. I’d be happy to read your essay if you’d like.</p>