Comments on an essay, please?

<p>I just finished the first draft on an app. essay. It’s on Christina’s World. I liked writing it, but I’m not sure it would work.</p>

<p>I’ll pm to you if you wouldn’t mind giving me feedback.</p>

<p>Thanks.</p>

<p>I’d be willing. I leave town tomorrow so might not get to it till the next day.</p>

<p>Thanks. Sent it.</p>

<p>Anyone else? Please?</p>

<p>Go ahead. (+chars)</p>