common app essay advice!!!urgent pls

<p>i just wrote an essay on how i never expected college applications to be this stressful( i really didn't )i'm an international student so i explained circumstances in my country, talked about how all I've ever believed in and wished for came through for examples. i explained how i desire to leave my little world and go out of it and concluded by saying how i didn't want to end up like my mom, also stating why.i would appreciate any advice on this and i would also appreciate someone reading and telling me frankly what they think of my essay..with some points on what to improve.</p>

<p>Send it over to me (via PM). I'll take a look.</p>