<p>I just want to know if it’s a good essay or not. Please give commentary of what you think and how I can improve. This is the topic:
Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you and describe that influence.</p>
<p>Hi there!</p>
<p>I currently work in my university’s admission department. Although I don’t have a say in the admission decision, I know how they operate and could give you an honest opinion if your essay works or not. I wouldn’t mind reading it and proofing it either. Please email it to <a href="mailto:marc.d.tan@gmail.com">marc.d.tan@gmail.com</a>. I look forward to reading your essay!</p>