Common App Essay Critique Please!

<p>–I think I need help mostly with structuring and content. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated! This is for the first essay option about a significant experience and its impact on me.
–Word Count: 658. Too long? Does it read like 658 words?
–PM me and I’ll send it over :slight_smile: I’ll return the favor!
–It’s about my experience in theatre and what the performing arts mean to me yadda yadda hehe.</p>

<p>Yes, 658, at 158 over the word count, is far too long. </p>

<p>I’d love to read it and help you edit, and would love it if you could take a look at mine as well.</p>