<p>It still has grammatical issues, but I was curious if anyone would like to read my admission essay detailing how I have changed and can contribute to a campus? I would appreciate it!</p>
<p>I can send it through a pm if anyone is willing to help 
I am running short on time and really need this. I would appreciate it.</p>
<p>Hi, Ill take a look at it. Pm it to me</p>