Hi, I’m applying ED, so I only have 9 days before the deadline (Nov 1st). Right now my essay has 671 words, and I’m still trying to kill my own darlings and make it fit the 650 words. Lately, one of my guardians read it, and told me it does not sound personal enough (since it revolves around tech stuffs + problems in my society). So now I’m second-guessing myself. I do like my topic and essay though. Would anyone help me proofread it and offer some feedback? I really appreciate your help. Thanks.
If you PM me your essay, I can help give some feedback!