Common App extracurricular "essay" needs opinions! :)

<p>Hey guys! So I wrote my extracurricular activity short essay (which is currently 200 words and 1,099 characters and needs shortening!) and I was wondering if some of you could edit it and tell me what you think! It's about mentoring kids how to play flute.</p>

<p>I'll PM you :)</p>

<p>Thank you all in advance!</p>

<p>Mine is about rubik's cubes. PM me</p>

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