Common App: Option #4 Can someone please tell me if this is good so far?

<p>The Prompt: Describe a character in fiction, a historical figure, or a creative work (as in art, music, science, etc.) that has had an influence on you, and explain that influence.</p>

<p>Imagine yourself as a never-ending road. The road was never seen any natural disaster and has been never led astray. For me the natural disaster I haven’t seen is the ability to become normal. My mother told me when I was a baby, crying was never a part of my bodily functions. Never crying might have seemed like a problem to most mothers but not mine. One day as I was on my way to school, the unexpected happened I accidentally tumbled out of a moving car. I was super late for class and my mother was speeding on the highway. Right when she was she about to stop the car, my hand move to open to open the door and fell into the grass. She yelled, “What the heck is wrong with you, crazy boy.” All I could do was just look at her and keep apologizing. My recklessness almost got me killed. During my childhood, when my sister used to play with her dolls and boys my age were playing with Hot Wheel cars, I was in my corner watching old black and white movies with actors like Cary Grant. The classics removed me from the regular world. Also, watching these films set me apart from my peers giving me a sense of pride. </p>

<p>Can you tell me if it makes sense and if it’s good. Any tips would be helpful thanks. My art is a photograph, i just will talk about it later,</p>

<p>its very unorganized</p>

<p>Besides being disorganized, I would never use “super late” in a college app.</p>

<p>are you trying to tell the admissions officers that you are ‘abnormal’?</p>

<p>…what was that about?</p>

<p>You also fail to respond to the prompt.</p>

<p>Your hand fell into the grass…?</p>

<p>Like the others said… “Huh?” What did that have to do with the prompt? Are you trying to say that it was that influence that turned you abnormal?</p>

<p>Sorry, but you asked for input and that just went Whooooosh - right over my head.</p>

<p>how should i organize it,</p>

<p>What does this have to do with the prompt? Also, I would recommend changing your first sentence. You should never start your lead with “Imagine this…”</p>

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<p>What does the story about you falling out of the car have to do with the rest of your essay? Admissions officers might be scared to admit anybody that “abnormal”. Also, grammar, organization, and answering the prompt are a mess.</p>