Common App Short Answer Critique

College Essays
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<p>I’ll cut right to the chase. Here is my short answer for the common app I am transferring but I live in an area that also has good skiing (if that matters, but I wouldn’t have chosen this if I went to college in LA or something). I know there is a little fat to trim. Looking for some suggestions… any critique appriciated. Thanks!</p>

<p>Edit: Put my entire essay here, and I guess that isn’t a good idea… looking for people to send it to. Please help… thanks again.</p>

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<p>Ummm, I’m not sure what skiing has to do with the prompts but send it over anyways. But also send me your email as I type my commentary in red and it doesn’t show up here.</p>