Common app transfer activity essay... proof-read please

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<p>Can someone please proof read my essay? I don’t know if i placed to much emotion into it.</p>

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<p>bump…</p>

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<p>ill read it…im going to UCLA next year!</p>

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<p>Thanks laser… anyone else have time to review my short essay?</p>

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<p>Sure (10char)</p>