Common Essay need proof readers!

<p>I’m in need of some help on my common app essay, which I already submitted to a few schools(notably Stanford). I know that my essay isn’t close to perfect, can someone not applying to any schools this year take a look at this? </p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

<p>please pm it to me, i will give my feedback</p>

<p>i’ll take a look at it!</p>