Commonapp ESSAY prompt 1

<p>Can someone read and critique(as harshly as you can) my essay for the prompt 1 of the common app. Please and thank you!</p>

<p>pm it to me, i’ll see what i can do :)</p>

<p>i can pm to mee (:</p>

<p>Sorry I can’t PM but I can email to you guys though, so can you have your email?</p>

<p>I’ll read it!</p>

<p>@Yunakira there’s an email option on our profiles if you can’t PM us</p>