Could anyone take a look at one of my transfer essays?

<p>I'm trying to transfer from Wesleyan (CT) University to Penn, and I've had my roommate read it but I think I need a few more pairs of eyes. I will PM it.</p>

<p>sure i'd read it and give some feedback on it.</p>

<p>sure, i'll read it(:</p>

<p>I will...I finished mine already</p>

<p>lemme read</p>