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(I came here four years ago from taiwan)
There were few issues that affected my education during my high school career. First factor was a combination of language barrier, home sick, and living in unordinary environments. My education in United States began at a military school (8th grade) with two-thirds of the students having been expelled at a prior school. After that, I went to one of the most demanding private high school with an admirable reputation. Truthfully it was quite a bit jump for such a short period. Second issue was an adapting myself to the demanding high school with no ESL program. However, I gradually found myself making trustworthy friends and involving myself in many different places such as sports, fine arts and even being an active member in class as year goes on. Everything seemed going well until my grandmother passed away in the beginning of my junior year. She was one of my few relatives who lived in U.S. It was natural for me to depend on her physically and mentally because my parents were in Taiwan. I was shocked. All I can say is that it was not the best moment.<br>
I have to confess that challenging myself to a different environment and losing my grandmother did affect a big part of my life and education. However, I proud of myself that I did my best I could in terms of learning. Foremost, through these troublesome but priceless experiences, I believe that they provide me a chance to be a mature individual as a whole.
this is additional information how my education was interrupted. Is it enough? does it sound weak? please help me!!!
<p>oh and as you can see, I basically explained three factors that interrupted my education. 1. weird environment 2. demanding high school 3. my grandmother. Did I address them all well or do you feel something is missing…thanks</p>
<p>i don’t like the word unordinary. i’m not sure it’s real… try atypical? extraordinary?
the sentence that mekrob was talking about should read in whole: “My education in THE United States began at a military school (8th grade) AT WHICH two-thirds of the students HAD ALREADY been expelled FROM a prior school.”
then just little typo/syntax stuff: “one of the most demanding private high schoolS” plural; “big (not bit) jump”; “Everything seemed TO BE going well until”
it’s good, the only problems you have are small language errors… if you want more correction of that i can give it, but i don’t want to ruin your own voice.
you conveyed your three points effectively; you could consider revising the sentence, “All I can say is that it was not the best moment.” into something a little more passionate and less dismissive, maybe just adding on to what you already said: “i was shocked” and, needless to say, found it very difficult to concentrate on my studies… or maybe i was shocked but, as i recovered, i realized how strong and resiliant i was? that’s a little forced and cheesy, but you know.</p>