Could someone read my common app essay on chess?

<p>I've written an essay on chess for the common app (and I actually used it for the National Merit essay a few months ago). I didn't edit it that much before, but now my parents and sibling are reading it and giving me differing feedback. </p>

<p>I'll PM anyone who's willing to look it over! Thanks in advance.</p>

<p>I'd be happy to help. Just pm me!</p>