Criticism Needed on Common App Essay and Supplement!

<p>If anyone would be willing to look over my Common app essay (prompt: significant person in your life) and my supplement for BC, it would be greatly appreciated. Just trying to put the finishing touches on my application. </p>

<p>Post here if you’re interested and i’ll PM it over, i’d be willing to comment on anyone’s essays as well.</p>

<p>Anyone…please?</p>

<p>If you don’t mind having your essay reviewed by a new member, I’d be more than happy to. Could you please critique mine as well?</p>

<p>Sure thing. I’ll send em over.</p>

<p>I’ll read and provide feedback on your essay.
Do you think you can critique/revise my essay & short response as well?</p>

<p>Ya sure 10char</p>

<p>Send me one of them and I’ll look it over.</p>