<p>I don’t know if people agree with this, but I’d leave off the “…and determined to go into the medical field.” at the end of the first one, unless you weave it into the essay a little more. It seems sort of tacked on and not quite related. Maybe you could talk about doctors without borders (if you do plan to be a doctor)–like an image of you doing that someday due to your grandfather’s influence?</p>
<p>The second essay seemed a bit cliched to me. I’d add some examples of specific research you’ve done or specific reasons you like to do research and want to continue to do research in the future. You could be more descriptive: describe the first time you saw cells under the microscope–how did it feel, what were you thinking, maybe who you were with.</p>