Critique a Couple of Essays

<p>I’ve got a couple essays that I hope some of you can clean up. They both pertain to experiences/impact of experiences.</p>

<p>Edit: also, if you guys wouldn’t mind telling me which one you think is better, I would greatly appreciate it.</p>

<p>I’ll take a look. PM me.</p>

<p>I’ll also take a look. PM me.</p>