Critique Common App Essay on being short?

College Essays
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<p>The essay prompt is for the background/story that is central to my identity.</p>

<p>It seems pretty cliche but I tried to make it as interesting as possible.
This is my first draft, so please don’t blast me too hard ;_;</p>

<p>Thanks for your help CC!</p>

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<p>I can help, but I won’t go easy on you lol. </p>

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<p>As I’ve said on other posts, feel free to send me your essay, but beware my brutally constructive criticism. ;)</p>