critique common apps short answer

<p>Hey i need some help i’m not sure what the short answer is supposed to be like. can i have some feedback on the one i’ve written? please?</p>

<p>George Gershwin once said, “Life is a lot like Jazz… it’s best when you improvise.” Like many others who were enlightened by that quote, I too, found my meaning in Jazz Club. I was once afraid – of exploration, of venturing out into the unknown and of going beyond. I had lived a sheltered life, and barely had the chance to go off the course my parents had thought out – much of my life was in its “perfect” place. Jazz, however, being a free, emotion-led form of music, made nothing “perfectly right” as I was used to. But jazz was free yet not without structure, emotion-led but not without rationality. Nothing was ever “perfectly right” but nothing was ever wrong. Jazz taught me to deal with unexpected events, it taught me creativity and it taught me to live my life. I am much less afraid, because I’ve learnt how to improvise.</p>

<p>Please help me!!!</p>